Wednesday, April 7, 2010

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god knows I've tried.
tried to write a song, a liturgy,
to conclude you
but I can't.
you spill over the sides of every word
you are a fumbling sky and I can't place your blue.
though I neighbour you, and pull at your skin for entry,
you come to pass without me. you leave me innocent.

7 comments:

  1. Loved reading this, interesting blog, will definitely be back here! :)

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  2. That "Why, thank you" sounded Kicha-ish. Which isn't a bad thing at all, as we know :).
    I love the way you've used the line breaks, conveys things (or feelings.. or whatever) so well!
    You lost me in the last phrase though.

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  3. True true. Especially after we got to listen to Kicha saying "Yu-es" so much today.
    You should check out the following blog though:

    http://sottai.wordpress.com

    It's got a real "Why, thank you" feel.

    About the last line. Maybe I'll explain in person? If you want, that is.

    Thanks for coming by, Adit-chit :)

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  4. This is just incredibly beautiful. :) Especially love "you are a fumbling sky and I can't place your blue."

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